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...Rachel......... by ~CornMuffin:iconCornMuffin:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Horror & Macabre > Open


Underneath the stars
With still develed wings; slumbered fireflies
Tonight...
The moon is half empty
And still beautiful
Beautiful like me without her
Devouring the fruits of decay
She fucked me silver
So i "strangled" her gold
I shattered my muse.......
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The pillow i carried turned to stone five miles back
Tears blurry with confusion
My fingers-entwined through her tangled threads of woven hair
Filth- no more than she already was- gathers,
Drags along, joining her naked body
A pit to the left- "RESERVED" - for her shattered soul
One last illumination; the half moon shimmers throughout her clouded blue eyes- dead...
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Bodies still in bed- we layed together
Existing "only" for eachother
My palm meets her nape
Her spine shivers like a kiss
Glimpsing in her eyes- love combined unloyalty....
I can see how deep the bondage is cutting her-
How her skin tastes where the leather is to tight- circulation "breaks"
Almost like yesterdays mistake...
Shes bleeding now, im only turned on
I watch what ive done; what im doing
Her life crumbles like November leaves
Eventually is here...

Goodbye my porcelain hades...
Goodbye my Rachel..........
©2004-2009 ~CornMuffin
:iconcornmuffin:

Author's Comments

This is about my girlfriend. Yes, i kill her. But its the symbolism; im not homicidle(towards her...).... Some screwed up stuff has gone on with us and i was inspired. im not gunna say why i kill her, or when, or anything else... if your a poet/ understand my particular symbolism, youll figure it out.... or something... i dunno...... also, its not quite in order; it states the problem(sorta), then shes already dead, but then shes dying(im killing her while having sex with her....).... you should get it....

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~SheaShea Apr 30, 2004, 5:58:55 AM
Really good. my favourite of yours... not because its about death, but its because its so deep and just put together so well... I envy your writing talent silly goose... Good job, i hope nobody misunderstands this...

-Shea shea

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Signatures are lame....
:iconcornmuffin:
~CornMuffin Apr 30, 2004, 6:18:27 AM
thank you so much sweetie! im actually happy with it(for once)... couldve been better, but thats alright. i think any real artist would understand it; theres no need for misunderstandings........
love ya
:hug:

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...All around me are familiar faces,
Worn out places, worn out faces,
Bright and early for the daily races,
Going no where, going no where...
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~monocot Apr 30, 2004, 7:13:37 AM
That is interesting.. Very good.

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:heart:
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~Punksk8ter Apr 30, 2004, 9:36:32 AM
Hey! this to me Jess is very deep and very emotional
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~shorelinerebel73 May 5, 2004, 2:11:29 PM
i luv it .. but ur kiling me ? haha my name's rachel lol it kinda caught my eye cuzza that .. really good tho
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~kinderwhore-amy May 6, 2004, 10:46:55 AM
I absolutely love this. Just the expression of sex and bondage and love and hate and struggle and passion... all of the emotions tied into this. i love it. the thoughts of complications and getting back at someone. the things that go through your head. the pain fading. like when you don't realize youre crying type of deal. How the omnipotent sex contrasts so greatly with death...

sorry... gah, i over-analyze everything.

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im not in love with the modern world
:iconcornmuffin:
~CornMuffin May 7, 2004, 3:36:12 AM
oh my god... thank you... nobody else reacted like this... do you understand the whole thing?


There will be waaaaaaay more good stuff on my gallery next week!

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...All around me are familiar faces,
Worn out places, worn out faces,
Bright and early for the daily races,
Going no where, going no where...
:iconkinderwhore-amy:
~kinderwhore-amy May 7, 2004, 12:25:52 PM
i cant wait! i loved this poem and im looking forward to more of your work!!!!

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im not in love with the modern world
:iconcornmuffin:
~CornMuffin May 10, 2004, 3:37:54 AM
oooo thank you so much! im putting new photos on today...... lots and lots of them...

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...All around me are familiar faces,
Worn out places, worn out faces,
Bright and early for the daily races,
Going no where, going no where...
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